tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post291477622915204845..comments2023-10-11T08:54:40.442-05:00Comments on Unedited: Wednesday WordiesAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03667521490706435608noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-59565569498999561952012-05-23T16:55:58.992-05:002012-05-23T16:55:58.992-05:00I like #1. It's kind of an awkward sentence, ...I like #1. It's kind of an awkward sentence, which I like. Tells me the voice might be really strong. Or...the book is just full of awkward sentences and it would give me a headache. Ya know, one of the two! :)Vikki https://www.blogger.com/profile/15654315874147137046noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-71581313174000610042012-05-23T11:58:14.037-05:002012-05-23T11:58:14.037-05:00I agree with most everyone else. #2I agree with most everyone else. #2Pattihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00685341739870191402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-85552698418398363822012-05-23T10:15:37.667-05:002012-05-23T10:15:37.667-05:00Definitely need to read #2! Awesome opening senten...Definitely need to read #2! Awesome opening sentence. :)Meredithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00462382909938737612noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-91626263712935876942012-05-23T10:13:55.198-05:002012-05-23T10:13:55.198-05:00Totally #2. Love that sentence! ;)Totally #2. Love that sentence! ;)Carolyn Vhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03780443388339294502noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-85937549978169471742012-05-23T09:27:06.556-05:002012-05-23T09:27:06.556-05:00#3! How funny that all the ones your selected had ...#3! How funny that all the ones your selected had to do with ages.Laura S.https://www.blogger.com/profile/13934230198562773803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-83447276313576943002012-05-23T09:11:47.665-05:002012-05-23T09:11:47.665-05:00I liked #2 best.I liked #2 best.Nicole Zoltackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07464800543376449290noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-77687028187758074002012-05-23T08:21:42.662-05:002012-05-23T08:21:42.662-05:00Huh, that's weird. I guess it must be a way to...Huh, that's weird. I guess it must be a way to instantly connect the reader, like saying. "It's okay, i"m not an adult, and we can say what we want here." Or something like that. I'm trying to remember where I state my MC's age for the first time.Amy Saiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00346366018143891761noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-33882578715023081192012-05-23T07:59:54.261-05:002012-05-23T07:59:54.261-05:00Wow. This is kind of weird. #2, that first line is...Wow. This is kind of weird. #2, that first line is very similiar to my first line of the new YA I'm working on. I changed it, though. Phew.... lolS.A. Larsenッhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06241633272588383935noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-11077228223554847672012-05-23T07:52:18.308-05:002012-05-23T07:52:18.308-05:00I also like #2. It occurred to me that it may even...I also like #2. It occurred to me that it may even be a little cliche, but I don't care! It's still the one I want to read! Sometimes things are cliche for a reason! :D Also, can I just say this is a great way to come up with a post. I'm always looking for new, interesting things to write about, and this is a great idea. Thanks for sharing it!<br /><br />lkhill.blogspot.com AND<br />musingsonfantasia.blogspot.comLiesel K. Hillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03860816358217211833noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-38597453263699370202012-05-23T06:58:17.775-05:002012-05-23T06:58:17.775-05:00Honestly only #3 is at all intriguing. I think it&...Honestly only #3 is at all intriguing. I think it's better to weave in the main character's age rather than tell it. Weird that editors or agents didn't edit these.Natalie Aguirrehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03756087804171246660noreply@blogger.com