tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post6890262851300042768..comments2023-10-11T08:54:40.442-05:00Comments on Unedited: The query doctors are in...Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03667521490706435608noreply@blogger.comBlogger33125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-51012037542395000772011-03-24T09:04:03.045-05:002011-03-24T09:04:03.045-05:00You got some awesome feedback. Now to bring it all...You got some awesome feedback. Now to bring it all together! Just don't lose the voice when you make revisions! Great job, Jen.Samantha VĂ©ranthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07446488761214047647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-64033216108441655302011-03-24T07:38:35.748-05:002011-03-24T07:38:35.748-05:00Just wanted to say thanks again for sharing that w...Just wanted to say thanks again for sharing that with me Jen!Matthew MacNishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03264738483763244969noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-32788605623727786722011-03-24T05:22:30.264-05:002011-03-24T05:22:30.264-05:00Sorry I'm so late! Hopping over now!Sorry I'm so late! Hopping over now!Jessica Bellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10889900730906728317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-65839754582964984582011-03-24T01:23:00.270-05:002011-03-24T01:23:00.270-05:00Lots of luck!Lots of luck!Lacey Devlinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05716109142743069204noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-30461431430967676212011-03-23T18:44:19.070-05:002011-03-23T18:44:19.070-05:00Matthew & his blog rock! Off I go...Matthew & his blog rock! Off I go...Jemi Fraserhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02214408467456320167noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-65437874827726778012011-03-23T17:06:29.019-05:002011-03-23T17:06:29.019-05:00Jen,
Oh how exciting. I must check out your query....Jen,<br />Oh how exciting. I must check out your query. It is quite scary, isn't it? Gosh. I've been toiling over mine for 2 weeks now and I still am not ready to send it out!nutschellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10967710710805174781noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-8887672808425933372011-03-23T16:26:07.804-05:002011-03-23T16:26:07.804-05:00Heading over now.Heading over now.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-17621874709757454172011-03-23T14:03:41.342-05:002011-03-23T14:03:41.342-05:00Just came from there!Just came from there!Talli Rolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04780882465745107715noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-47234943408160788142011-03-23T13:05:58.953-05:002011-03-23T13:05:58.953-05:00I read Matt's blog too--this is so exciting! ...I read Matt's blog too--this is so exciting! Congratulations on finishing and GOOD LUCK in queryland! <br /><br />CarlaCarlahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15380048190884905579noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-43821964857765158462011-03-23T13:04:28.635-05:002011-03-23T13:04:28.635-05:00A query is such a difficult thing, but I think you...A query is such a difficult thing, but I think you started off great and it's only getting better by the looks of it. Great concept by the way!Amy Saiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00346366018143891761noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-24907640075720630432011-03-23T13:00:37.647-05:002011-03-23T13:00:37.647-05:00Stopped by first thing this morning! You're g...Stopped by first thing this morning! You're getting some amazing advice. You'll have that killer query in no time! :)Donea Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15393184831994368021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-78037641650359150902011-03-23T12:59:42.607-05:002011-03-23T12:59:42.607-05:00Oh, and now I see the answer to a question I just ...Oh, and now I see the answer to a question I just emailed you. Ha!Elana Johnsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05877856005992028912noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-65428454056510885882011-03-23T12:47:38.858-05:002011-03-23T12:47:38.858-05:00Just came from there. Great query, Jen!Just came from there. Great query, Jen!Sara {Rhapsody and Chaos}https://www.blogger.com/profile/09824996048264979275noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-50813625239622665642011-03-23T10:58:28.355-05:002011-03-23T10:58:28.355-05:00I just read Matt's blog- you are getting some ...I just read Matt's blog- you are getting some great feedback!Abby Minardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11963640263845561309noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-7671984576451073752011-03-23T10:25:56.456-05:002011-03-23T10:25:56.456-05:00I'll hop over. :-)I'll hop over. :-)Shannon O'Donnellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17299313309059235876noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-35295301949651463862011-03-23T09:58:53.363-05:002011-03-23T09:58:53.363-05:00Exciting! I'm heading over to see it and will ...Exciting! I'm heading over to see it and will probably comment about it there.Tracey Neithercotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16539278941411542797noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-38827701595918926172011-03-23T09:52:13.924-05:002011-03-23T09:52:13.924-05:00Can't wait to see it.Can't wait to see it.Chris Phillipshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02638226375639228988noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-24937652902717017132011-03-23T09:51:09.857-05:002011-03-23T09:51:09.857-05:00I'm back.
Overall it's strong. I agree wi...I'm back.<br /><br />Overall it's strong. I agree with what Matthew said.<br /><br />My first thought is you us many adverbs. Too many for a query letter. Remember agents HATE adverbs.<br /><br />It seemed a bit passive. I would have liked to live in her moment more. Make the reader feel part of her.<br /><br />Does that make sense?<br /><br />I hope this helps.<br /><br />MichaelMichael Di Gesuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17047267262428143113noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-36046555833879647142011-03-23T09:43:15.137-05:002011-03-23T09:43:15.137-05:00On my way over.....On my way over.....Michael Di Gesuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17047267262428143113noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-68984175323809883862011-03-23T09:24:59.942-05:002011-03-23T09:24:59.942-05:00GOod luck sweets!GOod luck sweets!Creepy Query Girlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18115161057496086972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-60418583550505910482011-03-23T09:20:13.483-05:002011-03-23T09:20:13.483-05:00Been there!Been there!Bish Denhamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13359927719391990534noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-27418900481229411442011-03-23T09:19:31.585-05:002011-03-23T09:19:31.585-05:00Thanks for the heads up.Thanks for the heads up.Angelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12399082789777816445noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-28893315210318717092011-03-23T08:56:10.541-05:002011-03-23T08:56:10.541-05:00Cheering for you dear!!!!Cheering for you dear!!!!Jillianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04185423759021869130noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-25003598783699704952011-03-23T08:18:52.939-05:002011-03-23T08:18:52.939-05:00I've read your query (and loved it), but am he...I've read your query (and loved it), but am heading over there to see it again!Jesshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14121018905141253640noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3122888753760790051.post-6210876479414386782011-03-23T08:03:31.485-05:002011-03-23T08:03:31.485-05:00Hi Jen, I like the feedback much better than the q...Hi Jen, I like the feedback much better than the query letter. I think you have a great start, but it is short. I think, unless the agent knows you well, that you need to add something and make it longer. Something about you. Who are you? That's what the agent will be wondering. Most query letters I've studied have a little something about the author at the end. <br /><br />Sometimes there is a sentence on why you selected this agent to query too, although that is debatable depending on who you talk to. This all can be done while keeping the query letter well under one page.<br /><br />Finally, I would pay for an editor to give it a once over. I paid my editor a fair fee and believe me it looks so much better. There are things only an experienced editor can give you above and beyond what anyone else can.<br /><br />Best wishes for your success!!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com