Wednesday, January 12, 2011

WiP Wednesday

This week is crazy over at Jules week! The fabulous Ashley is hosting an intersting blog crawl. Stop by Jules to see!

I haven't done these in forever (WiP Wednesday I mean)! I adore them! They are my favorite posts to read of others (confession: only when they're short - don't worry. I follow my own rules - this time).

So here is something from my latest 2011 piece - It's Untitled.

He kissed me, the soft touch of his lips left butterflies in my stomach. I kept my eyes closed. If I opened them everything would go back to normal. His fingers ran through my hair, I gasped. My eyes opened and he was gone.

The butterflies fluttered away. I was left with nothing but emptiness. Sitting up against the backboard pulling my legs together and wrapping my arms tightly around me. My salty tears fell across my cheeks. I wanted to forget Carson but it wasn't that easy.

There you have it... So what are you working on?

43 comments:

Diana Mieczan said...

I really love this...Ohh sweetie wish you a great day and Im going over to Jules right now:) Hugs and kisses

ps: I am hosting a sweet necklace GIVEAWAY, later today :) ... Please, join in!

Guinevere said...

Very sweet! I know that feeling... you do a nice job here of recreating it for the reader.

I'm working on a YA mystery right now. And on revising Goddess of Vengeance so that it's all shiny and pretty and I can finally query it - I've been slacking on revisions! Maybe I'll post a snippet of the new story tonight when I get home from work - I haven't been doing WIP Wednesdays either, and I love reading others excerpts too! :)

salarsenッ said...

Nice and softly steamy.

Me: queries, research, and outlining. I'm pulling my hair out. lol

Theresa Milstein said...

Nice scene. I felt her longing.

I haven't worked on my WIP in too long, but here's an excerpt from a Halloween party from my manuscript Naked Eye:

The doorbell rings a few times and people start streaming in. I try not to crane my neck to spot Orion, but I keep craning my neck to spot Orion. Some people barely dress, while others have elaborate costumes. Dorothy from the Wizard of Oz comes in with the shortest skirt I’ve ever scene. Then I see a female chef with short-shorts and fishnets. “Yeah, that would be practical in the kitchen,” I mumble to Morgan. One guy is dressed as a surgeon and keeps asking the girls to examine their breasts. “It’s okay, I’m a doctor.” Lame.

Christine Danek said...

VEry nice. Interested to see more. ;)
Still revising you know what and outlining something new. Too much going on in my head. :)

Angela Felsted said...

What a great blurb from your WIP. I love it. It makes me want to read your manuscript.

A. Grey said...

My two primary WIPs are both retellings one Beauty and the Beast, and the other Snow White.

Thornbriar (Beauty and the Beast) which involves a very bad tempered, vain and caustic Beauty, and a Beast whose entire kingdom is under a curse that just might kill them when Beauty cures it...

And

Schneewittchen (Snow White) which is a dystopian that involves nano technology, gene tampering and a girl with a mean right hook.

Laura Pauling said...

I'm almost done with a first draft of my first YA - so I've written my first kissing scenes. Wow they could become addicting! Thanks for sharing, Jen! Cute.

Samantha Vérant said...

I'm all tingly. Love the name Carson. Probably because I never dated one. JUST KIDDING!

What am I working on? This week is kind of shot.

Amy said...

Glad you decided on a name for your sexy man. Love this excerpt.

I'm working on the end of my plot outline and character development for my 6th novel.

Happy writing!

Justine Dell said...

Nice! Nice! Nice! I've missed these little blurps. ;-)

Me? I'm working on editing!! Bleh.

~JD

Meredith said...

Oh my goodness, the romantic tension in this is to die for! I love that butterfly feeling--you draw the reader right in!

Sitting Behind Homeplate said...

You may regret this:

Math questions!

1. Sam bought 4 candy bars at $1.23 each. How much did Sam spend altogether?

First, Sam spent too much and second, what kind of candy bars did he buy? !!That is really the important question to answer. LOL

If it wasn't for tutoring, I would have more time to write. Your piece was much, much more fun to read then what I'm doing (or should be doing right now).

Connie

Summer Ross said...

great short read! I'm very interested in what will happen, or what has happened to Carson.

Right now I'm working on non-fiction essays for class, my 500 word goal statement for my masters and my ten page writing sample for my masters.

Lynn said...

I really like the line "If I opened them everything would go back to normal." Says so much. Very nice, Jen!

Teenage Bride said...

eeeek bet you culd have guessed I would be head over heels for that one lol.

I am a bad little writer... my works are all sitting unnatended at the present time.... ugh I feel so guilty... and yet so free

Carolyn V. said...

Oooo, nice scene!

Still working on that research paper. My last one ever!!! Yay! =)

Jessica Hill said...

Oh, that is so beautiful. I love it. :)

I'm working on a short story right now, although if it keeps going at this rate it won't be a short story anymore, HA!

I haven't worked on the novel at all the past couple of weeks because I've been working on the short. There's just not enough time in the day. *sigh*

Happy writing!

Melissa Gill said...

That gave me shivers. Very nice.

Erinn said...

"The butterflies fluttered away. I was left with nothing but emptiness."

Wow! I'm breathless. And speechless.

Lisa Gail Green said...

That was beautiful. I already like the MC.

Colene Murphy said...

Awe...She broke my heart! I have felt that before!! It's so sad! AMAZING job!! Success!!

Nicole Zoltack said...

Oh, wow, I loved it! You should post more. :)

I'm finishing up the last book in my medieval fantasy romance series. It's due to my publisher 2/1.

Shannon O'Donnell said...

Great last line! I'm trying to get started on a new project and continue some final line edits on my MS. :-)

Shari said...

Oooooh . . . I likeie!

Me -- finishing up a first draft.

Sondrae Bennett said...

Ooo...very nice. I already want to read more!

I'm taking the day off of writing since I'm having issues typing at normal pace due to a cut on my finger...stupid dog food can... But enjoying the time spent catching up on everyone's blogs!

Matthew Rush said...

Still working on the same novel. Maybe if I worked on it more often, it would take me ... years?

roxy said...

I like this piece, Jen. I like the first person perspective, and the butterfly allusion. I'm still at work, slowly revising my two stories. Good luck in 2011!

Elena Solodow said...

Untitled sounds Untriguing. Well, Intriguing actually. I was trying for a theme there, but it didn't quite work.

Krispy said...

That's a juicy snippet!

I'm currently world-building like crazy. I think it's starting to drive me crazy. But at least it's fun!

Talli Roland said...

Oooh! Lovely snippet! I feel all smushy and shivery inside!

Abby Minard said...

Ooh, nice Jen! I'm not working on anything right now- still in revisions!

Lynda Young said...

Great tease of a piece! Love it!
I've started editing one of my current WIPs. Much work to be done.

Stina Lindenblatt said...

Oh wow! That was good.

I'm working on getting the courage to start querying, and I'm editing my new wip. I'm loving it so much, it's easy to forget to send out queries. Hmmm. What would I rather do? Spend time with characters I love, or spend time researching agents who'll just end up sending a Dear Writer rejection (if they even do that much). Tough call! :D

alexia said...

Great tidbit! Love this.

Shannon said...

Good teaser there. =) Makes me want to know more!

I'm still working on edits and rewrites. Good times.


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Tiana Smith said...

Ooh, love it :) And right now, I'm working on writing a query ... which I'm finding is a lot harder than I thought it would be ... (I thought writing the book was supposed to be the hard part???)

Melissa said...

I love this JEN! I didn't know you were working on a new project! I'd love to here more if you want to email me about it!

Amie Kaufman said...

Oh, gorgeous, can't wait to hear more about this one!

Jennifer Hillier said...

Oooh, intense scene, Jen! Loved it.

Right now I'm revising an incredibly horrible first draft. The fun never stops!

Jessica Bell said...

Revisions!!! Argh! so sorry I've been awol recently. But you know I still luv ya, right? ;o)

Brigitte said...

What a pretty scene~ I imagined a lot of colors for some reason. (:

Right now I'm getting back into drawing while writer's block takes over. My brain is currently in hibernation (I've been out of school on holiday since december 10th).

Hannah Kincade said...

Sadly, nothing. I'm working on reading right now. I've been a little stressed and fried. I need like 10 naps and I'll get back to you.