Wednesday, March 23, 2011

The query doctors are in...

Happy Wednesday!

This post is going to be oh.so.sweet. For good reason! Today I'm asking all of you to hop on over to a friendly face's blog cuz I is in need of some help!

Matthew Rush is known for posting queries, both one's to tweak and one's who snagged an agent. Well I am about to start the query trenches and I have asked several friends to help me perfect my query. All of them have offered some amazing advice but I think all of your opinions would be nice as well...

So, to take a peek at what I'm about to send out into the query world, hop over to his blog. I'm looking for advice, thoughts, yup, that's right... you are the query doctors.

Go on! I'm about to push send and just need some last minute feedback!

33 comments:

Theresa Milstein said...

I'm on my way!

Sarah said...

Here we go! I hope you get some excellent feedback!

Lindsay N. Currie said...

I'm ready! Can't wait to see what it looks like now:)

KatieO said...

Clicking there now - good luck!

Catherine Denton said...

My stethoscope is ready!
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Ellen Brickley said...

On my way Jen, sit tight :)

Matthew MacNish said...

Sorry for the scheduling snafu Jen, they keep messing with my shift here at work!

Here's to hoping you get some great advice. I think your query is already in great shape, and with a few little tweaks it can be just as awesome as your novel.

Melissa said...

Good luck on Matt's blog today!

Stephen Tremp said...

Hi Jen, I like the feedback much better than the query letter. I think you have a great start, but it is short. I think, unless the agent knows you well, that you need to add something and make it longer. Something about you. Who are you? That's what the agent will be wondering. Most query letters I've studied have a little something about the author at the end.

Sometimes there is a sentence on why you selected this agent to query too, although that is debatable depending on who you talk to. This all can be done while keeping the query letter well under one page.

Finally, I would pay for an editor to give it a once over. I paid my editor a fair fee and believe me it looks so much better. There are things only an experienced editor can give you above and beyond what anyone else can.

Best wishes for your success!!!

Jess said...

I've read your query (and loved it), but am heading over there to see it again!

Teenage Bride said...

Cheering for you dear!!!!

Angela Felsted said...

Thanks for the heads up.

Bish Denham said...

Been there!

Katie Mills said...

GOod luck sweets!

Michael Di Gesu said...

On my way over.....

Michael Di Gesu said...

I'm back.

Overall it's strong. I agree with what Matthew said.

My first thought is you us many adverbs. Too many for a query letter. Remember agents HATE adverbs.

It seemed a bit passive. I would have liked to live in her moment more. Make the reader feel part of her.

Does that make sense?

I hope this helps.

Michael

Chris Phillips said...

Can't wait to see it.

Tracey Neithercott said...

Exciting! I'm heading over to see it and will probably comment about it there.

Shannon O'Donnell said...

I'll hop over. :-)

Abby Minard said...

I just read Matt's blog- you are getting some great feedback!

Sara McClung ♥ said...

Just came from there. Great query, Jen!

Elana Johnson said...

Oh, and now I see the answer to a question I just emailed you. Ha!

Donea Lee said...

Stopped by first thing this morning! You're getting some amazing advice. You'll have that killer query in no time! :)

Amy Saia said...

A query is such a difficult thing, but I think you started off great and it's only getting better by the looks of it. Great concept by the way!

Carla said...

I read Matt's blog too--this is so exciting! Congratulations on finishing and GOOD LUCK in queryland!

Carla

Talli Roland said...

Just came from there!

E. Elle said...

Heading over now.

nutschell said...

Jen,
Oh how exciting. I must check out your query. It is quite scary, isn't it? Gosh. I've been toiling over mine for 2 weeks now and I still am not ready to send it out!

Jemi Fraser said...

Matthew & his blog rock! Off I go...

Lacey Devlin said...

Lots of luck!

Jessica Bell said...

Sorry I'm so late! Hopping over now!

Matthew MacNish said...

Just wanted to say thanks again for sharing that with me Jen!

Her highness, Samantha VĂ©rant said...

You got some awesome feedback. Now to bring it all together! Just don't lose the voice when you make revisions! Great job, Jen.